|Reviews for Banter|
| D. Rochelle 6/1/12 . chapter 1
Beautiful, powerful imagery in this piece. It practically seethes with words, and I do admit I have a preference for that kind of writing. :) In particular "magma simmering under their skin," "make their hearts swell/And marginalise the shadows," and "yet their hearts, like tectonic plates, are moving, and/they will brush too close together again and again" are so moving to me.
A few things for constructive criticism. One is somewhat superficial - I think you meant linger when you write "Two questions lingers." Also you say two questions but you actually use three question marks, even though I realize the second question is compound.
The only part where this piece falls short for me is in this same section. "how long/will they be able to fight and then act/like everything's okay?" seems so... mundane and out of place compared to the rest of the piece. With your excellent use of imagery I feel you could word this section better.
Excellent poem. I enjoyed it greatly, keep writing. :)