Pleeeeeaaaasssseeeee write more!

nice chapter

Really good first chapter. I like your introduction of the characters and the plots. Plus I only saw a one minor issus such as not adding s at the end of a few words, but that's about it. Told you I wouldn't be to nit picky. Oh yeah and try using I a little less to let it flow better.

good

This is good, I like it your characters seem realistic too, which is sometimes hard to find. I do have one suggestion though, don't take it in offense I just like giving helpful reviews. I'd maybe suggest to use less I's, just to make it flow bette. I know writing in first person can be tricky, but it gets easier. Like instead of saying, I saw him and my heart pounded, you could say seeing his brown familiar eyes watching me, sent my heart in a pulsating race inside my chest. Anyway, keep writing this is a good story :)

I like this story. I can't wait to see what happens to James and Paige when James leaves to join the Navy!