I love your word choice. I can tell that each word was chosen carefully, both to get the exact right meaning and also so they would fit together in a smooth, poetic way.

The "sought" lines, especially, were great. The play on the tongue twisting had a great rhythm and made the meaning of the section stand out.

[Meet me once, and only there, shall light dance in your eyes.] There shouldn't be a comma after "there." Just a nitpick, but it confused the meaning of the sentence.

-Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

This has a very sing-songy, "nursery rhyme" feel to it. It also reminds me of tongue twisters, which I have never been good at. Whatever it is, though, I really like it.