:-O What will happen now? I shall have to wait, I suppose. If she dies they'll all be like 'Hope is dead! Hope is gone!' X-D

It doesn't seem like she's doing very much, while they're all getting killed. I'm sure 'the King' is evil but she seems a bit of a dictator too, shouting 'kill them' or whatever. But well written :-)

Hi! I got here from fanfiction :-) My username is the same on both sites X-D I think this sounds interesting and it got my attention pretty much straight away. I will now read the next chapters :-)

I like where this is going. I just wish there was more of it. I kind of want more description of the fight scene, and how the rebels won the day, because that sounds really exciting. I was a little confused about the bandana description (what you mean about 'around their noses'). But, maybe that's just me. I think there might be some little typos, but that should be easy to fix. Keep it up!