|Reviews for Man Hands On|
| YuePantera 6/7/12 . chapter 1
I can feel the rage in this. I loved the ending, though felt very sad once I read it. I think a poem is a good one when it evokes an emotion in the reader. This definitely did that to me. Good work. X
| AnonymousLily 6/7/12 . chapter 1
Pathetic fury of you hooked me- odd juxtaposition. I had to look up King Canute- although I loved the sound of the name-harsh. Still not smart enough historically to get the connotations. Ego lolls on crippled sticks- concrete vision of pathetic fury. I liked the harsh rhyme of spite wraps tight-The line break of you seethe/ you take steps to ensure I can't breathe worked well, and somehow the sounds of the words reflect anger- not sure what the technical term for that is. The no over and over- I visual it clearly- but hestitate over the "thing." Despite how horrible the father is, I dislike the use of thing- until I realize that perhaps it also ties into the narrator's perception. The parenthesis make me opt for that. The narrator's compassionless stare reflects the father- earning that final line. I see no improvement possible. Impressive!