Welp, since it's a time travel story which has yet to get a review, I'll take the honor of getting the first one in! It loos a little long, but it's totally easy to read.

Do you really have to censor the F-word though? Seeing how often the characters throw it around?

The chapter doesn't exactly make it open to us just what kind of world it's set in, but I can tell a few things!

1) It's inhabitants include animal people.

2) There's some evil guy named Dark the Chaos who the Mach Seven Team are opposing for some reason.

3) There's some monsters called Shadows who apparently... Rampage and stuff?

I'm not really clear on who the members of the Mach Seven Team are though. So far, there has been five on the job, David, Chad, Ed, Nick and Chrissy. Assuming there's seven members, who are the other two? Also, David and Chad admitted that they haven't went to Harpy Claw's Tavern for about a year and Nick stated that they have a lot to catch up on? So is the team on and off every now and then or did something happen that made David just stay home?

As for the characters, David's a little bland but this is pretty important seeing how quirky his friends are. Need to balance out quirkiness y'know? Chad... His dialogues are a pain in the ass to read but he's a nice troll character. Nick's hilarious, trap jokes are funny! Evania seems like one of those violent tsundere characters or maybe even a tomboy. Chrissy's a fun character too, the one who stays up late and watches B-grade movies! Ed's probably my favorite. Kinda sneaky, conniving all while being completely deadpan!

The action scenes should be improved on, a simple sound effect just won't cut it! You gotta explain their movements, what they did that caused that sound effect and yade yade yada.

All in all, I hope to know more about Dark the Chaos, the Shadows, how our protagonists fight and that one year gap between David and Chad with the rest of the Mach Seven Team.

... Just what kind of H-games does Chad play? Mmmmmmgh... Now he's starting to creep me out.