|Reviews for Noelle spits fire|
| Small Wings Flying 8/25/12 . chapter 1
immerges? Do you mean emerges?
I like the imagery in this. It relates back to the old story but adds other elements to it, the Alice in Wonderland motif with the cheshire cat and the divas, and you heighten the sinning image with the harsh imagery of carbon-heavy smoke and splinters and such. You've done a good job incorporating all those things together.
[the phantoms of your dry-sockets,] - do you need the comma there? I personally find it a little jarring.
I don't like the word "plume" because, honestly, it comes out a little gentle compared to the rest of your imagery so it seems a little out of place. That's just my opinion though; the rest of your wordings were very well used. Well done.
| electrical moon 6/17/12 . chapter 1
Great poem! I love the tone of it.
| the-lovely-anomaly 6/9/12 . chapter 1
Amazing poem, miss. I especially love the bit about Jonah. Religious imagery is always powerful.
| writingwithwings 6/9/12 . chapter 1
Not gonna lie, this poem confuses me a little...but in the way that I adore. Your word choice is eerie and fantastic. The story, though brief, is potent. I love it :)