Wow. This is a really emotional poem. Great imagery. If you ever want to talk, I'll listen.

Very nice poem. I love the poems format and style. Amazing job, keep it up :D

Nicely done, I really like the flow of your narration, you utilized stream of conscious very well. The only thing that I thought felt out of place was "fireproof tunics" although I like the image, I don't see how it connects with the rest of the piece. Keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.