youth, and freedom

but, I also read, loosing ones self

nicely written, making me wander

I like it

I like that you begin the last line with 'flying free' because it's the end of the poem so it emphasises how long they have to wait for freedom.

I also like the idea of chance you explore on the second line as it makes the action seem more erratic and tragic.

Great job

Ceri from the Review Marathon (link in profile)