| Reviews for Dark Pawn |
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Tanuki-san-chan-kun-whatever 6/17/13 . chapter 37I've read this story, and immediately fell in love with the way you've written this plot. This isn't the usual, heroine on the good side bringing brightness and glory with a happy ending. I absolutely love this dark twist on the usual epic fantasy; can't wait for the next chapter! |
Ms.Julia 6/14/13 . chapter 37Sly, very sly lol |
mysteriousguy898 6/14/13 . chapter 37It's hard to avoid misunderstandings when marching an army across an enemy nation with the express purpose of sowing chaos, isn't it? |
Gorilla0132 6/14/13 . chapter 1please do not take offense to this review, i do not mean to cause any: so i came out of this chapter with mixed feelings. it was a good chapter no doubt, but its the plot im worried about. it seems very bland, very cliche. we start with an epic battle, which is a very tired trend for a high fantasy story. the battle is a huge cluster fuck as you throw all these different races and speices and types of monsters at us all at once, instead of introducing them very slowly so we can grab hold of them. also, why not give an actual name to the Dawn Sword instead of just the Dawn Sword? if its such a big deal, give it a true name. Claudia seems rather young and inexperienced to be on the battefield. also i must admit i rolled my head so hard i nearly snapped my neck when i read "The Dark Lord". really? really? you couldn't name him anything else? this story so far, just seems like a story made up entirely of Tolkien cliches. your not giving us anything new to bite down on. in Fantasy, in this day and age, new is brilliant! we dont want more elves and dwarves and goblins! George Martin is doing just fine by actually distancing himself from Tolkien's ideas. if this truly is you great new project, i would recommend looking over it again with a keen eye. |
mysteriousguy898 6/9/13 . chapter 36Again with the awesome combat scenes! My only problem is trying to pronounce the names. Every name is three to five syllables, but at least they're all original. |
SagittarianArcher 6/8/13 . chapter 36This is one of the best stories I've ever read. This would be something I'd be proud to have on my bookshelf - this is definitely worthy of publication. |
Ms Julia 6/7/13 . chapter 36 So happy you updated! :) Claudia is really getting into the part of dark Queen now huh? Excited to read your next update, please make it soon! -the girl too lazy to log in |
Ms.Julia 5/31/13 . chapter 35Excited you updated :D And can't wait to read what happens next! |
Ms.Julia 5/25/13 . chapter 34If only they understood :( |
mysteriousguy898 5/17/13 . chapter 23This world you've crafted is amazing. Your characters are nuanced and not at all boring, the lore seems more airtight the more I look at it, and I can practically see the map of the land in my head. I faved at Chapter 4, but I was speechless until now. I'm going to review some more later. The only problem is some missing words here and there, but it's not that bad about it compared to others. |
Ms.Julia 5/17/13 . chapter 33Love love love update soon plz |
Ms.Julia 4/12/13 . chapter 32Sporadic makes me sad but I understand lol great update and I can't wait to read more |
Ms.Julia 4/6/13 . chapter 31Uh oh.. Please update this soon, like now :) |
Ms.Julia 4/2/13 . chapter 30Love what you have here :) and I can't wait to read what comes next! |
chibilover28 3/29/13 . chapter 1I love it. The action... the suspense... It sent chills down my spine - in a good way of course. good job! P.S. Please read my story :) |