This is beautiful. It reminds me of something that Rod Serling might write. It would make an excellent short film, as well. Thank you for posting this. It gives me hope for the world of modern horror/sci-fi writing.

This is cool too! I read the other story first and I think that "The Traveler" has some similarities to Him. I like this one a lot too. I hope you keep writing, its interesting stuff and makes for a great read. :)

Oh, my goodness; I absolutely loved this. It felt very polished and packed quite a wallop to the gut a few times.

I was actually reminded a little bit of a Twilight Zone episodes- one of the best ones, that is.

It was told very simply, with not too many words, but it said everything it needed to say and I really appreciated it.

This story was fantasticly written. The voice you chose for it was absoutely perfect, kind of aloof and observant and very non-dramatic. Beatrice was fantastic too, she was the funniest character, not to be bothered by everything that was going on, but the way you wrote it made it seem logically that she wasn't phased.

I will say it reminded me quite lot of Doctor Who, there's an episode where there's a crack in this boys wall and all this weird stuff keeps happening with it. Some of the dialogue and stuff reminded me a bit of that. Not that I'm saying you stole it or anything, it's just something I was thinking of as I was reading so I thought I'd mention it. I still really loved the story though, you're a fantastic writer, well done,

Bee

That was really interesting to say the least :o you did a wonderful job of blending description and dialogue. The traveler with the cigarette, I kind am left with a curiosity about him. Thank you for this great read :)

That was great.

Can you do a multi-chapter story about the crack?

Maybe the old woman could be the traveller this time. She could appear in some young boy or girl's bedroom.