|Reviews for My Boyfriend Makes Me Feel Inadequate|
| seventhswan 8/20/12 . chapter 9
oh my god. When Kieran was talking about whether or not he'd ever admit to having loved Tyler, that just. I just. I can't even, man. I know that feeling where it's like, you're so in love with someone in the moment, and then the farther you get from it, you start to wonder how real it was, and how that's sort of the most honest and dishonest you've ever been. anyway. whatever. You captured that really well.
Also, I'm so glad that Tyler is hopefully going to see a therapist. I just want him to get on the road to feeling better. At this point, I care about him more than the romance element. Whether he ends up with Kieran, Craig, or alone, it doesn't matter. I just want him to be more healthy. :(((
| seventhswan 8/20/12 . chapter 8
((bawls)) Oh Tyler, honey.
Okay, first off: I apologize for being MIA for so long. ugh. Anyway, I'm back now and excited to get caught up on a bunch of lovely stories. yay!
As for this chapter: guh, right in the feels. I mean it was beautiful, right? You write gorgeously, which is probably why it hurt so hard. ((sigh)) I think the detachment Tyler is feeling is really realistic. His sort of preoccupation with strange details, too. I mean, even the poetic stuff. I know when I've been really upset (although, I don't have depression, so of course, it's different) I often get caught up in small things and feel really deeply about things I wouldn't normally notice (the color of a shirt, the strength of the people around you). So anyway, this was really an awesome chapter.
BUT WHAT, OMIGOD, ONLY 11 chapters?! ((cries)) okay. Okay, I can do this. ((deep breath)) I'M JUST SO WORRIED ABOUT THE BOYS, OH MAN.
| Honunjama 8/20/12 . chapter 10
Oh I really really liked Tyler's conversation with his therapist! Very true! And I think you're showing his general paranoia very well. Great chapter.
How did I not know it was Housman who wrote that poem?...*shakes head* I feel so ignorant:P
| GreenGrass1 8/20/12 . chapter 10
Kieran and Craig working together to help Tyler! That's what friends are for. I like how you once again use the setting to help illustrate the mood. Very nice.
| Skyless-11 8/19/12 . chapter 10
Wow o.o that was fast! You've been busy this week I see xD three different chapters (Body, Ashes and Boyfriends).
And hahaha xD I've been checking Housman a lot and this poem I really liked xD Shared it with friends and all that xD Nice to know you like it too :D
So... this chapter, I LOVED. the story advances! WOoT! but again, you ended the chapter in the most annoying point for a reader xD you got our excitement build and then, out of nowhere you cut it QQ now I'll have another angsty week thinking about it and waiting for the next chapter QQ
But yes, wonderful chapter. And if I'd be a girl I'd squeal at Kieran's actions... but I'm not and my bass-baritone voice squealing would be hurtful to the ear so I won't xD
So please post the next chapter soon xD
| Aletiah 8/19/12 . chapter 10
I hope Tyler listen to his therapist and stop holding everything in.
Kieran doesn't give up in finding him! That's good! I hope Craig can help him so he can reach Tyler and talk to him.
| Aletiah 8/19/12 . chapter 9
Tyler, why didn't you pick up the phone? Then everything had been fine! Or maybe not... but I hope it will be. Soon.
Good thing they find out he's depressed before it got worse. I hope the therapist will be able to help him, but I think he needs Kieran more than a therapist.
| PenguinHearts 8/15/12 . chapter 9
"Perhaps you would be interested to know that I picture this story in washy watercolours..." Yea, so did I, actually!
Great chapter! I wonder what Kieran is doing... hmm...
Plus, I like the little poem you put on here; I liked it!
Keep writing! :DDD
| auel 8/14/12 . chapter 9
HELLO FELLOW VANCOUVERITE
I heard pride was awesome, but it was too frickin hot that day. My friends said it was pretty fun and it was an eye candy galore! Did you go to any other pride events?
| PalindromeIsntOne 8/14/12 . chapter 9
Kieran Kieran Kieran. I did a proper slow blink at that beginning, but I forgave him even though I was thinking Tyler Tyler Tyler.
'He quickly checked to see if Kyle was paying attention to his little display.' was a very neat touch.
Kieran's little self-motivational thing was lovely. I feel though, somehow, a tad out of character. How do I put this... it's like some of the narrative-insert style you had in earlier chapters momentarily crept in and blended with Kieran's voice.
I find it amusing and awesome the dynamic with Kyle there though, and cracked a smile at that sentence Kyle was trying to read whilst listening to his friend. Oh, Kyle. :)
What is it with parents waking their kids up? Why have I never experienced this phenomenon? Is it just that I always get up on time or that my resident parent didn't care or both? Anyway, Tyler's mom seems a darling.
The doctor's visit was quite nicely done with the compassion of the doctor obvious. I think that you could have just done some of that conversation, however, (like up to "Yeah, but I don't see...") rather than the whole thing, then let it trail into passive and catch up on the jist of it in a short paragraph after Tyler leaves the room. I don't know why I have that opinion - I think it might have been more effective emotionally or something.
Oh, the part where he meets up with his mum again after though! *feelings*
I wonder what Kieran's up to.
| PalindromeIsntOne 8/14/12 . chapter 8
I'm back! Uh...yeah. I've a fair bit to reply to and catch up and review and real life is a bit...ugh...so I'll do it in pieces. Reviewing seems the best way to start.
I really like the prose-poetry. I could envy that. 'To this too Tyler was numb, like a prosthetic limb.' This. And similar. Nice. (When I say 'nice' picture someone in a suit tipping their top hat with a small smile of respect. Not that that resembles me at all, but it's the gist of what I mean.)
'Like he finally got the joke.'. This, and the revisiting of their idyllic meeting (in Tyler's mind, anyway), is so effective. The coldness of the coach, too. Ouch.
I don't think I need to say anything about the ending of this chapter. It speaks for itself.
The whole chapter is very emotional, and I like the link at the beginning back to the previous chapter.
I've cut the end of this review into a PM which I will probably send separate in a bit, because my brain went of on a long tangent-ish thing at the 'Eleven chapters?' as you know I can do...
| Yaleni 8/13/12 . chapter 9
YESye syesyesYEs! And ugh you're killing me here with this kieran/tyler thing but i love it though ugh
| Skyless-11 8/13/12 . chapter 9
"I know, I wouldn't choose it if I had a choice… No, that's not true. I'd choose it a million times, even if it meant suffering and loneliness and heartache and a thousand jabs from the stick of the world. Even if it meant chains and subjection and illness and hunger, if it meant loss of reputation, virtue, money, sanity, I'd do it. Because he's him. He's him, and I'm me, and together we're us, and that's the only way I can explain it.
I loved this. Seriously. This is ... well? let's call it a definition of love? Yeah. Love is something never to regret... be it over or not, if it was a real feeling no1 should ever regret having it.
2ndly: WOOOTTTTT! Finally another chapter xD I know it hasn't passed a lot of time since the last one, but to me it seemed an eternity QQ So glad it finally came xD Yes I really like how this is developing. Not saying that I didn't expect it, I mean... it was obvious that Kieran would be the one not to give up... But I really like his determination. Proves just how much he loves Ty... And... on one hand it would seem selfish of him to do so (and we all know selfishness is the opposite of true love...) but I think that this hasn't to do with selfishness. It's just this feeling Kieran has, the feeling that it's obvious, natural for them to be together. And he's not doing it for himself, he's doing it because, however uncertain of Ty's feelings, he obviously has some kind of confidence, and I suspect it to be this feeling "he's mine, I'm his" kicking in, therefore doing it for them both.
3dly. I love the poem o.o and I don't really like poetry... Guess I know what my new obsession is xD
4th. Definitely. I would be the first to read the tips I respect you lots both as writer and as literary critic, so I think such tips would help me lots.
5th. Depression? I had a feeling it was going that way *if it wasn't obvious*. I'm actually looking forward to see his meeting with the therapist (I guess you will write it right?)
6th. You said that You were going to end it in a few chapters, but I actually wonder how will you pull it off xD Because at this point the story still has holes, the characters do. And where Kieran doesn't *he's rather flat as a character, though lovable* Ty just has so many holes as the round character he is. And let's say they somehow get back together in 2-3 chapters. Unless you wanna leave a "very" open ending, there will be just way too many holes, mainly because of how Ty is. And I think that making him solid (where he is very "liquid" now) in just 2-3 chapters would ruin the story... Though... yeah, that could be pulled off with the help of the therapist, but, hey, where's the fun in that? xD plus, I said before "I want maaaaaaaaanyyyy chapters more :D"
In the end, I would like to congratulate you on another awesome chapter, thank you for acquainting me with Housman, and tell you how much I'm waiting for the next chapter.
| GreenGrass1 8/13/12 . chapter 9
I'm glad Tyler got help. Depression is difficult to deal with on your own I think. Any help you can get will be great. Gosh, I hope he feel better soon.
| chibikodo 8/12/12 . chapter 9
I hope Kieran didn't take the ignored phone call negatively. But I sure hope the therapist can help Tyler. It's probably too late for his soccer team to accept him back but I suppose it's not like anything matters to Tyler anymore at this moment.
Looking forward to the next chapter.