Hello!
Wow!
have i ever mention that your writing style is very very nice :)
hmmm... a blue stone hidden in the blue temple... i sense a storyline on that :D
this was a really amazing chapter
can't wait to see more :D

Wow Penryn definitely sends chills down my spine, although he acts gentlemanly enough. He is just treated with wary suspicion by everyone, and he seems to delight in the fear people show to him. The Dabrians themselves look rather powerful, and I like the inclusion of history in this story.

I wonder if the Dabrians have any physical or mental traits that differentiate them from humans.

Orchid dragon! Awesome species. Darn, do you happen to play any dragon hatchery games?

Oh wow, they are BONDED. Did not expect that, that's going to cause quite a bit of complications. These unshakable bonds, I can imagine where they would be useful, but also where they might end up really awkward.

Favorite line: In fact, she remembered snuggling deeper into them on both occasions.

Penryn is a troublemaker, which is ironic because he claims Lia has been the one causing all the trouble!

I like the way you paint Penryn, the only description is that you can't tell if his hair is brown or blond, he apparently has a strong talent for making people uncomfortable. Going to be a rather interesting character, I see. I hope he ruffles a few feathers.

Bug fix: Rusalka yawned and began nibbling at her should again.

"But if the stone is green, then why is a red species of dragon named after it?"
haha what.

Breakfast was eaten in this chapter!

Interesting how the dragons are compared to playful cats rather than dogs!

I think lia showed her cute side by falling asleep during the festival and having to be carried away by Naisi. Although she still feels unfamiliar around the elves, I am sure she will gradually grow closer to then.

A world of very sweet people! All the elves are kind, despite an initially formal and cautious exterior. Although Lia addresses them as 'my lord' and 'my lady', Tirvon and Ireya have an easy way of setting her at ease with simple kind gestures and smiles.

I have a feeling that the firefly is a symptom of something a lot more serious than just a headache, based on how Siera is acting!

I love the colours and flavours. The nervous excitement is completely realistic and I love how Rusalka echoes Lia's emotions.

It's also pretty cool that Lia already knows two heads of the Four Houses. And yay Ursavon is back!

Haha, I like how the atmosphere diffused, and Lia's feelings of frustration at being played with, because it mixes so well with relief and a little awkwardness. Thank goodness the elf didn't have bad intentions, Lia might have gotten into a little trouble.

There hasn't been real trouble since Eric Dagov, though, and possibly the spiders.

Good line: "when Lia reached the part concerning her capture, she smiled and nodded as if she had expected nothing else to happen." knowing vs non-knowing.

I'm even more curious as to why Naisi was angry. Somehow I doubt that anger is directed particularly at Lia, most likely it is directed at her circumstance.

Wow the firefly concept is pretty curious.
And the elf, I bet we have met him before!

I can't help but wonder why the firefly is angry.

Did not expect the broad smile! It's actually a rare display of unreserved affection in this story, bar the dragons.

Oops enough reviews for today, but as a closing note, I realise that I would not change a thing about this story.

Distinctive character building: "Knowing from experience with Mac that it was wise to let an angry person simmer down, Lia refrained from talking for several minutes. Instead, she and Jesse sat side by side in silence. Rusalka and Calaurin kept perfectly still; not even the tips of their tails moved."

Argh, the letters bled me dry! So good. And the birthday present, ARGH!

Once again, I feel the differentiation of roles in the sexes.

favorite line: "Lia suddenly wanted to rest her head on his shoulder. ...No. I mustn't. As much as I may want to, I mustn't."

Looking forward expectantly to the festival.

I glad much of the tension of her kidnapping is resolved! Sort of, I was hoping for greater confrontation, but I guess that can't be helped considering Lia's sweeter and reserved nature.

I really appreciate the simple hooks at the end of every chapter.

What do the dragons do for the story? Ah! I feel like I almost know.

Favorite line: "Elaine...what can I do here? I can't do any of my duties as a dragonwoman until I turn eighteen - until then, what are Rusalka and I supposed to do with our time?"

Favorite line: "Rusalka nudged Lia's arm, cheeping like a baby bird."
Why are dragons too cute?

Once again, something simple, distinctive about this piece that you have here. Essentially two things happened here:
They had a meal.
They had a bath.

But both so well described that they are episodic in themselves, without the need for deeper meaning within the story. While most tales rush to the climax, yours lives in the daily moments.

Of course, I can't wait to read more about the obvious tension between Jesse and Lia. It's so bittersweet because Lia has obviously been kidnapped against her will, but apparently in such beautiful and luxurious surroundings, with a sister she wanted to see... and these dragonmen, of course. I love her restraint.

Bug fix: his face was a healthier colour *than* it had been

I absolutely adore your story and can not wait for the next installment! :)