Form/structure: I was unsure about your structure as the line length didn't fit the pattern exactly. Line 1 stanza 1 had 4 instead of 5 syllables, line 2, stanza 2 had 6.

Ending with one word worked visually though and separating the word 'dies' definetely made it's meaning more impactful which was great.

I did wonder what the poem was about though as it starts with 'like a crow' not 'a crow' - mysterious, I like :)

Good job

Ceri from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

First line has four syllables

Fifth has six.

This poem seems disjointed, the lines unconnected, like there are several unresolved stories.

P.S. Rooney Maara?

Brilliant. This is the perfect example of less being more. And the ending hit me like a brick. Killer last word (no pun intended).

Wow... In such a short poem you were able to create such an emotional, creepy poem. I liked it! :D x