Whoa, I didn't realize that this was a short story. I think you could have made it full length, but I sort of liked that it was short. Seth freed himself, but not entirely. It just goes to show that everyone suffers for the choices they make. You got that message across very clearly.

I like the twist about Elise's appearance. That was epic!

Well, now I'm left with nothing more to read and a pile of finals to study for...Thanks for posting this so I could have a little break! :D I always enjoy your work.

MW

Uh oh is right. Interesting concept of a witch's afterlife. I think she will change her ways before the end of this. And Seth will come to love her. Aww.

My only suggestion would be to watch passive voice (something that I have been stressing over in my own editing so I am totally aware of it in everything I read). Basically, whenever you see the word 'was' there is almost always an instance where you can substitute that word with something more colorful. That's what one of my professor's told me, and it has proved to be most helpful! Plus, it spices up your writing! Of course you can still use 'was,' just not every time. :D

I'm so happy to be reading work from you again! I love it, and I really like how you have developed Seth. Keep it up, friend!

Such an interesting spell he is under! It's like, he can do things, but he is possessed in a way. I like how his thoughts are his own, but his actions are controlled. He still knows who he is for the most part.

Did not see the truck part coming. I feel like she would have suffered numerous internal injuries upon impact. I think she's dead.

But this puts Seth in an interesting predicament, doesn't it? Continue to help the only girl in his life, or take a chance at freedom, killing her all at the same time. Maybe he retained some love for her after all? Doubtful, but interesting for sure.

Still not sure what to make of Elise. She heals people, so she must be good.

OK, so Elise has many secrets. I like that. In Seth's p.o.v, she is a monster, but this chapter helped me to see that she has made some correct decisions, and some wrong ones. She saved his life, but in a way, she took it as well. Poor Seth. He is so helpless. Poor Elise, she wants to do good, but may not know how yet. Great story!

Oh wow, this was REALLY good! I love the emotions you give poor Seth: his criss cross between his bewitched feelings and his real feelings! Very impressive!

This read like a real book! I'm so excited to find out more about this simply alluring characters! Are you thinking about continuing this?

MW

Wow this is a really interesting story :O Really cool concept too, I love the way you do dialog. It seems really natural when the characters talk.

Well written. :D I compliment you.

The content is also very good, and everything is explained so well.

I like the name "Seth". I don't know why, but I think that is a badass name. XD

Oh, one thing I have remark. In the last chapter where Seth kills her, you wrote it as if it's so easy. I mean it's perfectly fine if it's meant that he just wanted to get it over with, sort of.

Anyway, well written, good story, and now I'm gonna check out that song. -

well, equivalent trade i guess. seth killed elise, and now he has to suffer through the rest of his life with those terrible memories. not sure if that's "equivalent", but crime and punishment?

no seth! DOn'T DO IT! TT

oh no please don't kill elise! TT

Aaawwwwwhhh!

Oh Snap! Hahaha you're amazing!

x Mevans

Nice!

x Mevans

yay elise isn't a bad person! seth x elise ftw! XD

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