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| Reviews for Sense of Innocence |
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   Errant Ember 7/19/12 . chapter 4:( That's sad. |
| Silvermoonrising 7/7/12 . chapter 3 This is good, you should definitely continue. :) |
| Guest 6/27/12 . chapter 3 Confusîng so far but update soon |
| Errant Ember 6/27/12 . chapter 3 hmm in terms of love it seems like she would be with the officer but it's the officers apprentice that is taking an interest in her. |
| Corrie Girondi 6/27/12 . chapter 3 She is innocent. And the narrator switched. And this chapter is short. Sorry. I guess I like stating the obvious. Continue to update! |
| Corrie Girondi 6/27/12 . chapter 2 Totally confused as to what is going on, but I like Taylor, and don't like the narrator. Something that usually doesn't happen in stories. Maybe that's why I'm hooked... |
| Corrie Girondi 6/27/12 . chapter 1 So, despite it being fairly rough and unedited which usually turns me off reading a story, somehow this one is different. I want to read the next chapter, I want to see what happens next, but most of all, can I please edit this for you? I'm being totally serious here. I might be new to FP, but I have skills. Pinky swear. |
| Crimsonovel 6/22/12 . chapter 1 Your use of imagery is very attractive. "Rain peppered the ground" is a great phrase! I recommend reading over your story again and fixing the flaws and grammatical errors, such as missing commas. Also, I find that a few of your sentences are very difficult. A great tip is reading your story out-loud to hear for fluency and errors. Give it a shot. |
| rosethorn200 6/21/12 . chapter 1 OMG,OMG,OMG! I really love your style of writing and where this is going, it's a great chapter and I can't wait for more :)x100 |
