|Reviews for The Forlorn Delphinidae|
| Small Wings Flying 7/29/12 . chapter 1
I don't like the definite way you've written this. I think it would work better more ambiguously, ie. [The silhouette of vessel form] - a silhouette or the silhouette of a vessel form] - it's more flowing, less concise and therefore more effective with the imagery.
I like the length of your lines though because they add to the soft shadowy tone of the overall poem.