Holy ship captain! There's not a lot of stuff that can make me cry, but dang! This actually had me tearing up.

Sorry. The review posted before I finished.

You have a strong voice that shines through your writing. This definitely deserves more than twelve reviews!
Thanks for posting it!

Wow! What a sweet little piece. I really enjoyed it, with all its twists and turns, but I feel like it's rather unfinished. The ending was abrupt, and there are some ends left untied.

Altogether, however, it was clever. writing voice, a

Does he tell her? I need to know! This is awesome _

You keep blowing my mind! I can't wait for more!

DAMN. IS THIS HOW GERALDINE IS ALWAYS NICE TO HIM?! And how has Loren held him off for so long?

Well that was unexpected. I seriously didn't see the whole Harold thing coming.

Oh, that was an awesome chapter :)

Interesting.

Now that, was a very interesting chapter.;
Do continue.

Sincerely,
-Dreaming

Now this is what I call a classic -amazingly- retold!
I really hope you keep going, because this is awesome.

Sincerely,
-Dreaming

Hey Rainy! Love this new story. Youre so twisted. :P I did see a few typos as i was going through, but i only have a phone to work with at this juncture while im following the story. Regardless, solid work. Interested to see more. Im very intrigued by Anne.

I did not pick up on any typos, thankfully. I hate them as well.

Oh, she is young and in love, and on her way to San Francisco, a place that I often dream of running off to. There is just something magical about the place, isn't there?

The summary for this story intrigues me and I am reading to see where you take it. Also, everything was in bold, was that intended upon, you know, for the beginning?

Cairo.

Well this is the first story I have ever read on here and I'm glad to say it met my expectations :) Just one question: why is the whole thing written in italics? Is this a flashback? I don't remember seeing any typos, but I hate them too. Great opening by the way- it has an air of mystery and suspense.

Hi Arrianna,

I noticed that you added my story to your favorites, and I very much appreciate that. I think it's important to repay that favor by reading and offering reviews to those who support my work. I crave feedback, and find it hard to get, so I'll take your word that you welcome reviews, and give you some: Love the beginning. The writing is concrete, clear, and vivid. You have provided a solid look at your characters, and also make it so we are interested in finding out more. As the text moves on, into the dialogue, I began to get a little confused as to who was speaking. I was also unsure as to why all the dialogue was in italics. At first I thought that it was all in the characters head, but then realized it wasn't. This is an easy fix. Just add a few, she said/he said. You don't have to put it on every peice of dialogue, and of course you want to vary that phrase, but it should be done to avoid any confusion. I would take the italics off as well. They should be used to show some type of internal dialogue. What you have is an interesting start, and I'm excited to see where it goes!

Again, thanks for supporting my story, and I will continue to support your stories as well.