It doesn't matter that it's short. It's really good. Write more!

You've got a really good thing going here. Your descriptions are excellent, giving a real picture of what's going on. I was greatly interested in this story as soon as I started reading the summary. I can't wait to read more! No criticisms so far! (:
By the way, you're very good at summaries! Mine always stink.

This story has a promising beginning, I like how descriptive you are with your characters. It helps me to visualize them, keep writing!
Emmie

Oooh...Foreshadowing! Can't wait to hear more! Just a few grammatical errors, but I don't really care. :D Good job!