|Reviews for The DragonBreath Pearl|
| Ever Twinwood 7/15/12 . chapter 1
This interests me. I like reading stories that use this voice. It feels fitting that he named her Violet, not just for the color, but as a way of tying the two together. The last paragraph feels a bit out of place though, or forced, maybe. I think it needs an edit, but I'm not sure just quite what that is.
I see that it's marked complete, but this feels more like the beginning of something to me. Perhaps you'd consider doing something more with it?