You switched Liam's name to Tam as Liam got back into the taxi.

I need more of the story! The suspense is killing me. And, by the way, the story is awesome. Love the original take on demons(correct me if I'm wrong). Oh, also, if you make/publish a book, please tell me, because I would love to buy it.

keep up the good work.

When Tam was being interrogated, there were a few moments where I was lost. You say 'he' a lot so at times I wasn't exactly sure whether you referring to Tam or Spider. Other than that, everything looks really good!

I love unexpected moments like the big reveal in this chapter. It makes everything so much more dramatic. There are barely any gramatical errors and the ones that I have noticed don't really detract from the story. Also, your writing style is pretty detail oriented so I feel like I have slow down to read it. It takes a little longer to read but I can definitely see how much thought you put into this.

I know I haven't been Zoe's biggest fan but following her storyline made these past couple of chapters all the better. Great as usual.

It looks like I have a lot of catching up to do. To be honest, I'm a bigger fan of the chapters from Tam's perspective than the ones from Zoe's perspective (Maybe it's more relatable?...at least for me). Also, it's great to see that you're getting into the more supernatural element of the story.

Ooooh, this looks interesting!

Geez, you're churning out these chapters pretty quickly but that's great because they've all been incredible so far. Your style of writing makes every scene tangible and the dialogue seems play a big role in that. It's conversational, flows and doesn't detract from the more serious elements of the story. The only thing that's been kind of hard for me to follow was the cosmology in the last chapter. I don't know if I just can't wrap my mind around it or if there's just a lot to follow. I'm sure it'll become more clear to me in later chapters though. Keep it coming!

The only the slight problem I had was following the conversation between Roy and Tam (you used 'he' a lot and it was a bit confusing). Other than that, absolutely amazing so far! Definitely looking forward to more.

Engaging and great pacing. More please!

I, for one, cannot wait to see how this whole scenario plays out. It has a compelling summary and first chapter, and the second only seems to heighten the intrigue. Your writing style is very straightforward and there are few - if any - spelling and grammar errors, which I appreciate very much. However, I notice that you tend to use more commas and sentence fragments than necessary, but I can overlook these in favour of the story. I do encourage you to keep writing and keep improving!

Pan