|Reviews for The Ballad of Mona Lisa|
| Nami98 7/8/12 . chapter 10
gotta love this chapter :) update soon!
| not Ross 7/8/12 . chapter 10
Now WHY would you stop right there and leave us hanging? I want to know what's going on! And what the heck Tanner/Daniel did with Rochelle! Hm...
| Nami98 7/5/12 . chapter 9
Colton, too. I wouldn't know how life would be without my family, especially since my family is so HUGE.
And Tanner..I can believe that he's changed...its life :/
UPDATE SOON! I really love this story! :D
| Nami98 7/5/12 . chapter 8
Aww! Poor Echo..or should I say Brooke. I know how it feels to be jealous like that..and I can understand how hurt she feels even though its not bigger than a pang. That used to be the case with me and my bff, but the following years after, I became center of attention because of my looks :/ im sure she will, too. I'm sure she's gorgeous, its just everyone feels self-conscious and only sees their flaws when stuff like this happens. Update soon! I wonder how Tanner is gunna react (because he spoke only a few words).
| not Ross 7/5/12 . chapter 9
how does Colton live in a trailer when he doesn't have parents? Don't you have to be 18 or 21 or something to own a house and live in it by yourself? How does he pay property taxes and stuff? I'm finding that a little bit implausible... there are just too many things that are involved in owning a living space that it doesn't seem like a high school junior could pull off. That's something you may need to explain, along with why he's living alone in the first place. Although the latter probably has something to do with Daniel/Tanner.
I didn't even realize Rochelle and Tanner had been a thing! hm... The story behind that one will be interesting as well.
This is for the previous chapter, but I wish more had happened at the party. There was quite a lot of build-up to it (the getting ready scene wouldn't be necessarily needed except to build tension for a super-intense party scene) for not that much gratification. At least, that's how it seems to me.
Also, wouldn't Echo's parents have, like, completely freaked out if she didn't come home for the night?
| not Ross 7/4/12 . chapter 7
it's not boring
| Nami98 7/4/12 . chapter 7
BadASS. I am so glad that you update multiple times a day...err...daily...i dont even know what im saying
BUT THANK YOU. This story is AMAZING and so mysterious and KJASHFKJAHSFAKLHGIUEJGAG. UPDATE SOON!(:
| not Ross 7/4/12 . chapter 6
dun dun dun... Man, Echo really does have a complicated family - and I thought my dad's side was bad! Haha. And Paul seems like one messed up kid. It's fascinating that Echo was so obsessed with him. Maybe obsessed isn't the right word. But she's always there for him. There must be more to the story!
I like the money can't buy simplicity line.
| Nami98 7/4/12 . chapter 6
| Nami98 7/3/12 . chapter 5
OH MY GOSH.
YOUR KILLING ME HERE! UPDATE SOON PLEAAAAAAASE!
| not Ross 7/3/12 . chapter 5
Ooh. Intense. This is my favorite chapter so far. I didn't know Rochelle was her cousin though! Does Rochelle go to the private school? And again, the Paul saga is getting more and more fascinating to me (I usually don't like it when people put italics at the beginning of their chapters because they can't ever seem to do it tactfully, but your italics keep me guessing! haha) Anyway, I'm really interested as to what's going to happen with this.
I can't keep Colton and Chad straight for the life of me. I can never remember which one she likes - does she like either of them? Anyway, I'm really confused about them, I think just because their names look so similar on the page. It's hard to find names that aren't easy to mix up, especially when you keep adding characters, but it's good at least for main characters to have all their names look and sound really different. Just something to keep in mind for next time! :)
Also, it might be easier for you to respond individually to reviews via the PM system rather than posting a broad sweep in an author's note.
| not Ross 7/3/12 . chapter 4
interesting... I like the second scene with her parents. Sometimes it feels like you put stuff in (like the iPod) just for the sake of putting it in. I mean, it tells us that she's rich, but we sort of already know that. Idk. Maybe it will come up later.
Speaking of being rich, I love that she's rich and she's not snobby about it or embarrassed about it or flaunting it or anything like that. She's rich, she always has been, and that's what her life is like - it's very natural to her, which makes it feel very natural to the reader. I've seen a lot of stories that give the stereotypical rich girl, but I think it's way more realistic how she just takes it in stride like there's nothing weird about it. Because to her, there IS nothing weird about it. That's probably how it is in real life.
The brother saga is still mysterious...
P.S. when did Chad say that he needed an iPod?
| Guest 7/2/12 . chapter 4
love it(: I feel bad for Echo tho, thats gotta be a terrible feeling...as for Paul... :[
| not Ross 7/2/12 . chapter 3
So I thought the italics at the beginning of every chapter were flash-forwards of stuff that what's-his-name (the skipping school guy) was getting her to do once they were dating, but that's clearly not what's actually going on... so now I'm wondering if it's her brother she's remembering in the italics?
| Nami98 7/2/12 . chapter 3
This is so AWESOME! Echo is so mysterious and whats his face is catching my interest...I have a good guess on who Paul is, but I want to know more about him(: and those boys she keeps thinking back to! UPDATE SOON PLEASE! I love this!(: