Ouch, I feel so sorry for Orion! And Mina too, all her conflicts about being popular...

have you ever been on youtube watching videos and every new video you click you say to yourself "ok, this is the last one, and then i'm off to bed."? well, that's sorta how this was for me. i just finished reading through all your chapters and the night has escaped from me. it is now about 8am and i've just finished...spent my night in reading...well, that and doing chores, but still, nice addictive read, can't wait for the next chapter, hope we can read a little more in detail just how Jinx is helping them "master" their abilities...

just a question, why do you write "maths" instead of "math?" is it because the full word is mathematics?

Oh I like that Toby doesn't respond to Lyra's comments :) one day they will learn to get along and then they will get married.
And Mina and Jinx I swear I love them. Ohh pretty pretty shirtless men I feel you Mina, I feel you.
Of course Ally and Orion are the cutest little sweethearts you guys know I love them okay I just want Ally to find out about Orion's mother and hug him to death so they fall in love and get married and go to the ball together tears

I've been meaning to say this for a while, but Orion appears to have aspergers syndrome. Just in case you needed the correct terminology for his lack of skill in social situations. It has been a great annoyance to just keep hearing of him as socially akward

It’s interesting how Toby is ever so ready to help his friend, but when his girlfriend is called a ‘bimbo’, he isn't fazed in the slightest. There is possibly a relationship problem there. Lucas’ stupidity is amusing, he should know that everyone hates rugby, although he had a point when he mentioned stamina. Also, it would be good to know where he hit Lucas and the resulting damage. It's nice to see that Orion's father has his priorities straight 'it's okay if you blow up the school, wait? You punched someone! You're in serious trouble young man!'
All-in-all, good job. Finally the stupid are punished for their lack of intellect.

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Ok i have to admit redoing the story was a good idea, the personality of the characters, especially Toby, Orion and Mina are really coming to life here :) I like the way Toby, although still a knuckle head, stood up for Mina. I do miss Allyness though :D She's my fav because of her ditziness! And I do hope that she will punch Lucas soon too, like the other version! *crossing fingers*

This is really, really well written! I'm in love! At some points it seems to move just a bit quick, but it seems to fit. Well done!

Awesome chapter. Good in Orion for standing up to Lucas I hope the consequences are not that bad and same goes for Toby. Hopefully Mina stops hanging around Scarlett and Lyra is a good friend. I wish I got to hear more from ally, seb and a bit more of Lyra though but maybe they will have more in the other chapter. Great chapter you two and keep on updating also update the forbidden year. Please and thank you

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Hey guys,
Sorry for the lack of reviews during the holidays! This will have to be a super-massive review to make up for it.
Okay, so do I start with Orion and Ally? Of course I do. Oh my goodness - you guys know how much I love those two - please let Orion ask Ally to the ball. PLEASE okay that would be perfect they are the CUTEST little couple I swear. The way Orion keeps looking over at her and she is just the cutest little bubble of a girl.
Mina is probably my favourite character - she's really the most relatable and I love her sassiness. I adore the Mina/Jinx - I really really just want Jinx to love Mina as well. They are the preciousest (totally a word) couple and they're so SASSY together I just picture all the hair flipping and sassy sassiness it's perfect.
Toby and Lyra - well, you guys know how much I love them, too. All we need is for Toby to think that Lyra's dead and realise he can't live without her (or vice versa) and then LURVE and cutesy couple arguments (hehe).
Poor darling Seb - I really just want to hug him all the time, the sweetheart. Introduce his soulmate soon because that boy really needs a good hug. Hey, wouldn't it be hilarious if he was the first of the bunch to get a girlfriend/boyfriend?
I really enjoy the Lyra/Mina friendship and am looking forward to more of that at camp :)
Anyway, loved all the updates (as always - are you getting bored of my adoration yet?) and eagerly anticipating another chapter.
x

Really good chapter! I think orions dad is so awesome and his uncle is so funny no wonder Lyra likes him so much. I'm really happy that Mina is in the cabin with Lyra and ally along with the others I'm also excited for when that chapter will come. I wonder wher Orion will be put maybe with Toby? It is good seb got a spot but I wonder what happened the other year. I would hate it if Jinx did that to me. Great chapter hopefully you update soon.

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I applaud you for adding to the characters mentioned earlier, instead of leaving them to rot.

I really like this new version I like how seb's power is not just flying it's also telekinesis and Toby seems smarter than in the old version, Lyra is Lyra, I love Orion especially how he is so calm and I mean love love, and i love Ally's personality I can relate to her so much. It's weird how in zero hour Orion and Lyra are best friends and in the forbidden year Lyra hates Orion but I cause there both different stories. I really like this version and now that ally has brunette colored hair I can relate to her even more because I think in the old version you said she was blonde. Oops I forgot Mina well the streak in her hair that changes colour depending in her mood is really cool and I hope Jinx can help them control their powers. It's really good so please hurry and update as much as you can

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I'm so glad you started making this again. It's really good hope you two can update soon. I love ally so much maybe because are quite the same I am really random and crazy like her trust me. Orion and ally are so cute together please update quickly.

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I am so glad u girls r still doing this fan fiction it's awesome. I have read the the first 6 chapters fraught and I am still reading. Also in the forbidden year please keep Orion alive he must not die before shimmer Kali and seir