Yessss! Emeary is so amazing! Finally Daniel can be nice now. Sorry I called him an ass lols.
xM

I loved this chapter!

Ah! I loved the disgust on Daniel's face when Em held the knife to her throat and the twist in Em stabbing Michael!

And I loved how Aaron is so witty and clever and the humor between Daniel and Aaron at the end! Wow you are queen of twists, turns, and witty sarcasm. I adore it, as I adore your story.

So Michael definitely has some powers. Either he can withstand pain...to an extent...or he can read minds or something...well, no or he would have forseen Em stabbing him...I don't know but he has some sort of mysterious magic...

Great chapter. However, to make it more believable, maybe having some of the Loyalist members coming to their aid to fend off the entire Realist army would be good to add. I mean, I love the idea of three heroes battling out an entire army, but it just would not happen. They need backup! But you add things that distract the guards and allow your heroes to get away so it is not really a big deal.

I might go as far as to say that this is your best chapter yet, but all of them have been so good, too. Keep it up. Can't wait for CH12!

MW

umm...emeary does realize that killing herself will only even up the two sides again right? they're fighting for her because she made a difference right? so if she's dead...there's no difference. she won't be able to help the realists, but she can't help the loyalists either right? i'm just thinking here...

(Btw: It would not let me post a review as myself. Gar, frustrating. So this really is me, just thought I'd clear that up.)

And the stakes have raised!

I was not expecting for Em to barter her own life for Daniel's! Great twist!

And poor Aaron. He makes me laugh with his plans that no one listens too. And he is the definition of brave and selfless. Just throwing punches to help his friends. I think he is my favorite character. And I'm wondering if James was a spy! After all, he knew where the camp was and led Aaron and Daniel right to it!

This chapter was paced much better than the last. My only concern now was that it seemed so easy for Aaron to rescue Em. Wouldn't the general's tent be surrounded by guards. Maybe he cut a hole in the back with a knife and slid in?...I don't know.

Still a very exciting chapter. Not one chapter has been boring, and with each chapter, your writing gets better and better! Great job!

MW

One word: Badass

now we meet an even bigger ass than daniel...

Excuse my French, but OH SHIT! Btw finally someone besides me told Daniel he's an ass ;)
xM

How scary!

Michael seems like a slithery fellow, one I would not want to mess with.

I have a question: you said Aaron was seven and Daniel was five when they met. Then you said seven years later to where they are now. Is Aaron only fourteen and Daniel only twelve? Or am I missing some gaping hole? That seems so young!

I like how Daniel takes out his anger in finding assignments. He sure is an explosion of emotions, like you said in your PM. I like Aaron, but wish he had some romantic feelings for Em. That would cause a hot mess of a love triangle, one I would love to see. It would destroy the brotherly relationship that Daniel and Aaron have, and a course of events could re-strengthen it. I don't know, just an idea. From experience, writing love triangles is so fun :)

I wonder how Michael found out about Em's powers! I bet he has some sort of power too.

And when does this take place, just wondering?

And I'm still trying to figure out where Em got these powers. Oh I'm sure you will reveal later, but I keep thinking about it in my head. Some witch, was she born with it, did her parents have it? Oh questions.

The only other thing I would suggest is slowing down the pace and writing more descriptions. You are a fantastic story teller and that would be the only thing to enhance your skill! Still love it though!

Can't wait for Ch10!

Sorry for the rambling, long review!

MW

Great, Em finally got tough! Loved it! Her weariness and his mixed emotions were shining in this chapter! Daniel is such a frustrating person! You can tell he hates/loves Em, and wants her for his own, but wants her as a possession, yet may also want her to love...he is a mix of emotions isn't he?

And I do wonder if Aaron and Em have a thing starting up. I sense a love triangle!

I loved this addition! You just keep me itching for more!

MW

damn is right...

Uh ohh...

they are so canon! XD emeary and daniel i mean. if they aren't...umm...i have no idea what to say about their relationship then...

Oh wow, that ending with Em entering the tent: brilliant! I could see it all so clearly and your characters each have such wonderful distinct personalities! It was great!

So who does she love, Daniel or Aaron. Personally I'm on Aaron's side. I'm sure Daniel will come around, but he is still an ignorant jerk. Aaron is so sweet and loving. I'm team Aaron :D

Anyways, please update soon! I can't wait!

This all happened so fast! I mean, it was not bad, but wow, this could have happened over the course of many chapters. I still liked it though. At least there is always a twist and an abundance of excitement.

I like how Daniel and Aaron work together as a team. Daniel is so feisty and determined while Aaron is calming and reasonable. I love it.

I cannot wait for Em to find her inner strength and not be so timid. When she does, I'm sure it will be fantastic!

MW

I loved this! The last part was written very beautifully!

I wish you had described the Forest of Spirits. It seemed like such an enchanting place but I would not really know because there was no description of it! But that does not distract from the fact that you are just building the anticipation!

There have been very few stories on this site where I really want to know and care what happens to the characters. Keep up the good work. I would only suggest slowing down the pace so we readers can really enjoy the world you have created.

Hope that is not too harsh!

MW