|Reviews for The Summoned Beings: Submit your OC! Open!|
| S3xy Ice Queen 11/14/12 . chapter 1
When r u gonna update this story? Its really good. I read it while ago and took some time finding it agin. I like the charcters alot!
| Sock my Rock 8/12/12 . chapter 6
Your lucky you still have time before school. I started school on Tuesday of last week, and as a senior this year and I have lots of homework even though most of my classes are easy this year. So don't expect my reviews on the day you update but a couple days later than the actual update date... enough about me on to the actually review.
I agree and I wanted to call you out on the fact that there hasn't been any sign of a villain. Maybe anti-hero but no villain. And what are heroes with out a villain. I'm actually very curious to see what kind of Villain you'll introduce for this story, because there are lots of different villain archetypes you could base your actual villain off.
Rein and Salem's relationship was the obvious focus of this chapter, and well it was really great. It's always good to start off love relationships slowly, but if this keep up you could probably hook them up in a couple of more chapters. Both Rein and Salem seemed relatable in this chapter, and that always good to see in characters. You make people relate to them, and well people (including me) end up liking them more for who they are.
I wonder have you ever actually looked for a Beta Reader, they can really help out when looking for grammar mistakes and plot holes. I mention this because you still noticeable grammar mistakes. By no means it doesn't kill the story(it's still a great story), but some are noticeable. Enough of my ranting until next chapter then Ma'am! Looking forward to what you have in store for us!
| JustMeMaddiB 8/10/12 . chapter 6
Ah i loved this chapter, & now im dying for more! I love Rein and Salem's relationship, i hope they end up together cause that would be amazing. And way to leave it on a cliffhanger! Update sooon paweeeese :3
| Shayna-18 8/10/12 . chapter 6
Yay! This chappie was just sooo fantastic! Loved the scene with Rein and Salem! So well done and only a few mistakes.
Salem seems to be warming up to Rein! and shocking Calen hehehe!
Cant wait to read more of the other characters!
I absolutely adore the whole story so far!
| LunairiaBlaze 8/10/12 . chapter 6
Aww cliffhanger D: it looks like Salem and Rein were having a little r-o-m-a-n-c-e there *shot* xD I had a feeling that Salem had a soft side to him. Cant wait for the next update.
| Valkyrie99 8/10/12 . chapter 6
They have now found the other one, now to deal with the boy with the book. Aww Salem cooking for Rein was so cute! X3 Please update soon! This is awesome! :3
| Miles Montgomery 8/10/12 . chapter 6
There are a couple spelling errors and I think the word you're looking for is C'mon not common. Other than that, not a bad chapter. I was actually worried for Rein. Post more soon. :)
| Sock my Rock 8/6/12 . chapter 5
0.o wow! I'm gone for one day and you update twice! I'm hella impressed by the fact you've updated twice in a day and the chapters are both great! That really shows the readers that you're committed to this story, and you don't skip out on the quality.
I'm glad too see that both Emilio and Alluna have made their apperance, and you've done both of them justice. The other O.c's are just as good, and a couple of them have started too really grow on me. That being said I do think that it's good idea to take a break from introducing O.c for at least one chapter so we can get use to the new O.c. Overall I'm still loving your story and I can't wait to see what you have in store! So please keep up the great work!
| JustMeMaddiB 8/6/12 . chapter 5
Hahaha, Rein sure does say heyo bitch a lot. I like that, shes got spunk(;
You are such a great writer, it gets more and more interesting each chapter! I love it when new OCs get introduced so its disappointing that i will have to wait a few chapters for more ): but i am willing to wait lol. I just love all the characters and all their different personalities and how they all fit together so well.
Also, im sorry i havent reviewed in a few chapters, ive been suuuuper busy o:
Keep up the great work!
| LunairiaBlaze 8/5/12 . chapter 5
I logged on today an whats the first thing i see? you used my OC! i literally did a little happy dance cuz i didnt think you would choose him. the characterization was really good an i cant wait to read the next chappie.
| Valkyrie99 8/5/12 . chapter 5
Uh oh the evil kitties have come to invade! :3 Please update soon! This is so awesome! :3
| Shayna-18 8/5/12 . chapter 5
So i loved this chappie because of my adorable little creation was in it more! I loved the interaction between Salem and Rein! And then you added in Jessica's little 'Have fun you too!' and it just made my night haha
Its good your taking a break of accepting characters! :) the ones ya have so far are awesome! I like how ya have a couple just showing up every now and then, with 4 main ones so far!.
I looved the length of this chappie! I can't beleive how much detail there is in it about 3 hours?
I look forward to see what happens to Rein and Salem!
- Shay! :)
| Miles Montgomery 8/5/12 . chapter 5
Great chapter. Starting to get interesting. Well, in case you didn't get my message, here's my OC when you start adding them again.
NAME: Joseph Elizabeth Maxwell
NICKNAME: Joey (Beth when he’s being teased)
GRADE: High School Senior
PERSONALITY: Arrogant and cocky. He believes he is the best. For him, losing is not an option. He gets real pissed when people refer to his middle name, as he is very sensitive about that. He does have a soft side for cats. He’s a looker as well, but his arrogance and cockiness usually ruins the picture.
APPEARANCE AND CLOTHES: Green hair, hazel eyes, wears glasses. He’s 5’11” and very skiiny but extremely acrobatic. He wears Blue Jeans and usually a tank top with a short-sleeved shirt underneath. Sneakers and wears bandages around his hands.
HISTORY: He comes from a rich family so he has never had to want for anything. What he doesn’t know is that he’s adopted. He used to be nice and gentle but always got teased about his name so he began learning how to fight and eventually got so good and so fed up with being teased, he developed a cocky and arrogant streak. He’s extremely protective of his younger sister and when she’s around, she brings out the best in him.
WEAPON: His weapon of choice is a greatsword with a golden hilt encrusted with jewels and a blade tipped with a diamond.
LIKES: Girls and cats
DISLIKES: Boys and bullies
WEAKNESSES: Snakes, spiders, claustrophobic, and extremely afraid of the dark
STRENGTHS: Running and card games
FATAL FLAWS: He will stop to help children and cats no matter what
FAMILY: Samuel Maxwell (father), always gone on a business trip; Lillian Maxwell (mother), deceased; Olivia Maxwell (younger sister), middle school
ROMANCE: Goes for the quiet type. Can be paired with one of yours.
SUMMON: Wolf with grey fur, black paws, 2 tails each with a blade on the end, and muzzle. 6 yellow eyes. 3 on each side. Electricity flows around it.
NAME OF SUMMON: Fafnir
GENDER OF SUMMON: Male
ELEMENT OF SUMMON: Lightning
POWERS/ABILITY OF SUMMON: Has superspeed. It’s howl can create a vortex of lightning
HOW YOUR SUMMON CAME TO YOUR CHARACTER: One day, about a year ago, when he was crying from being bullied, it appeared to him and offered to be his friend (he has forgotten this and treats his summon like a soldier, think of the way Rika treats Renamon I the beginning of Digimon Tamers, but Fafnir honors the pact that was made.
SYMBOL OF YOUR SUMMON AND WHERE ON YOUR CHARACTER'S BODY: Wolf paw, back of Joseph’s right hand.
SUMMON'S CHIBI FORM/HUMAN FORM: Wolfhead keychain that he hooks on his belt, also can look like a miniature version of himself
SUMMON'S PERSONALITY: Gentle and loyal
Something you want to happen to your character: I want him to soften up over time. A gradual romance with one of your OCs could help
Do you want your character to die?: Yes. I want him to die heroically, protecting those he loves, mainly the OC he has a romance with and his younger sister
How do you want your character to make his or her appearance?: When the group is having a hard time, he shows up to rescue them. He continues to hold it over their head and brags about it from time to time.
REACTIONS TO MY OC'S: Thinks they’re a bunch of losers and wimps. In fact, I want him and the OC he falls in love with to hate each other at first. Like I said, gradual.
| LunairiaBlaze 8/5/12 . chapter 4
NAME: Kamiya Takahe
NICKNAME: Taka (Kami-chan by younger sister and mother)
PERSONALITY: Kamiya is a very cheerful and friendly but tends to be a little too trusting of others. He also has an odd habit of getting into trouble everywhere he goes. Along with being friendly, he is the sporty type (plays all sports but is best at basketball) Kamiya is very competitive when it comes to sports; he’s not a sore loser, if someone beats him at a sport, he would attempt to learn from them in order to get better. Kamiya has a deep love of card games as well (pokemon, yugioh, ect.) and was a hardcore collector at one point. He tries to befriend everyone and has a strong dislike of fights of all kinds, be it verbal or physical; he is a peacemaker and believes that everyone has the ability to live together peacefully, they just choose to ignore that ability. He will fight if need be; like the time when he witnessed an elderly woman getting robbed by bullies from his school.
APPEARANCE AND CLOTHES: About 5”5 with dark brown hair (short bangs that still randomly find their way into his eyes) the barely reaches past his ears and honey-gold eyes, slightly tanned with a lean and slightly muscular body. His hair is usually messy and spikes in random directions; he usually wears white T-shirts with blue jeans and a thin navy blue jacket but during the summer he wears black or red T-shirts and black jean shorts. He sleeps in long pajama pants only and during the winter wears T-shirts with long-sleeved shirts underneath and jeans; he wears tennis shoes all year round. He wears silver earrings and a silver chain with a small charm of a Celtic knot in the form of a triangle. (no real reason aside from the fact that he thought it looked cool) He wears tank tops of all colors and white or black shorts when playing basketball.
HISTORY: Kamiya was raised in a borderline middle class family with his mother and sister. He barely remembers his father because his parents divorced when he was seven. Do to the divorce, his mother started working longer shifts to support Kamiya and Kaira and was rarely home because of it. This forced Kamiya to grow up early (even though he doesn’t act like it) in order to handle common house hold chores. Caring for Kaira at such a young age, the two of them became much closer than normal siblings and are nearly inseparable now. When he was thirteen, he began playing basketball and, due to their strong bond, Kaira would join him whenever he went out to practice or compete in school. It was in hig school when he befriended Nobori.
WEAPON: Black long sleeved gloves with sharp serrated blades at the ends of each finger. Due to being athletic he knows hand-to-hand combat as well.
LIKES: Sports of all kinds, basketball the most, enjoys watching basketball games as well.
DISLIKES: Cooking (even though he is really good at it), bullies and people with racist or snobbish tendencies
WEAKNESSES: Anything that requires a lot of thinking (math and brainteasers) and puppy-dog looks (used by Kaira to get whatever she wants)
STRENGTHS: Very determined; once he sets his mind on something he will do anything in his power to make it happen.
FATAL FLAWS: Naïve even for his age
FAMILY: Mother: Atsushi Takahe; works at a local children’s hospital and is rarely home. Father: Shinosuke Takahe; whereabouts unknown because they are divorced.
SIBLINGS: Younger sister: Kaira; currently in grade school
ROMANCE: Yes, he is attracted to girls with strong personalities (though not as extreme as Rein but close) a taste for adventure, and a competitive spirit.
SUMMON: art/Lion-Dragon-hybrid-319063041?qgallery%3Ajazy82 4&qo0 this is my own creation but I thought it would be hard to give a detailed explanation from scratch. He is blue instead of red while his mane, paws, under belly, wings and the plates at the end of his tail are silver.
NAME OF SUMMON: Nobori/Atsume (pronounced ought-sue-meh)
GENDER OF SUMMON: Male
ELEMENT OF SUMMON: Ice
POWERS/ABILITY OF SUMMON: Nobori is able to fire large hail stones, ice beams, and winds with sub-zero temperatures from his mouth. Nobori is also able to conjure small-large blizzards depending on the intensity and frequency of his wing flaps.
HOW YOUR SUMMON CAME TO YOUR CHARACTER: Nobori had been watching over Kamiya and Kaira ever since their parents divorced. It was during high school that he befriended Kamiya under the guise of an upper classman and to two eventually became best friends. (At first Kamiya barely tolerated Nobori’s stuck up attitude) Nobori revealed what he truly was to Kamiya when a senboku posing as a substitute teacher had attacked him. Instead of fighting in his summon form, Nobori destroyed the senboku by bombarding it with icicles shot from his hands. After he was safe Kamiya demanded to know what the senboku was and how Nobori was able to defeat it the way he did.
SYMBOL OF YOUR SUMMON AND WHERE ON YOUR CHARACTER'S BODY: Light blue tribal snowflake with five points that extend and curve to form a dragon’s claw. It is located on Kamiya’s left shoulder blade.
SUMMON'S CHIBI FORM/HUMAN FORM: Nobori’s human form is that of a young man who appears to be eighteen with mid-back length, slightly spiky silver hair, a pale complexion and sharp ice blue eyes that appear to be narrowed because of their shape. When angered it is shown that he has sharp canine teeth. He wears a male kimono; light blue with a dark blue snowflake pattern and a white obi and is normally barefoot.
SUMMON'S PERSONALITY: Nobori has split personality disorder (so servere he goes by different names); in one personality (Atsume) he is bubble and hyper like Rein with a very short attention span; in that he may be talking to someone one second and then get completely distracted by virtually anything the next. He tends to sulk or complain much like a child when he doesn’t’ get what he wants. (mainly chocolate; he’s addicted to the stuff) In his other personality (Nobori) he is rude/aggressive and thinks he is better than every and anyone else; he also has a small sadistic side and enjoys pelting innocent passer-bys or anyone who annoys him with tiny hail stones shot from his fingers. Both personalities are protective of Kamiya.
Misc: Kamiya is slightly bi-curious (he wonders what it would be like to kiss a guy but won’t actually try it)
Something you want to happen to your character: don’t have any ideas in this category.
Do you want your character to die?: No, but if necessary, he dies when he sacrifices himself to protect Kaira.
REACTIONS TO MY OC'S:
Reinforce/Rein: At first Kamiya is swept away by Rein’s personality and ability to curse in almost every sentence (I find it oddly hilarious that she does that) but quickly warms up to her personality because it is similar to Atsume’s.
Her Summon, Akusenmi: Nobori tolerates Akusenmi because of his quite personality and may even try to start a conversation when he is bored. Atsume, due to his bubble and slightly clueless personality, tries to start long conversations about anything that goes through his mind. (A lot cause of his attention span)
Veniza/Ven: Kamiya wants to befriend Ven in hopes of helping her come out of her shell and learn to be more social. He admires her loyalty for Rein and finds her sleeping habits to be funny but tries to help her overcome them.
Her Summon, Gaius: Nobori tolerates Gaius for the same reason he tolerates Akusenmi. He often tries to get Gaius to spar with him because their elements are the most similar. (if you don’t mind c:) Atsume gets along with Gaius best because of his kindness and may help Gaius get Ven to talk more.
Arron Yuto: Kamiya is slightly wary of Arron and tries to stay on his good side but because of his bad luck streak he may get into trouble or say the wrong thing around Arron. Like Arron he doesn’t mind bending a few rules to have fun but will draw the line if it harms another person.
His Summon, Remeyu: Nobori gets along with Remeyu best because they both enjoy causing others misery, though they tend to get into fights because of their aggressive natures and when Nobori mocks Remeyu’s chibi form. (if it doesn’t bother you) Atsume has a small fear of Remeyu because of his aggression and sadistic nature.
| Shayna-18 8/5/12 . chapter 4
YAY! Ya updated!
Rein sure has a bundence of energy! I like how shes's interacting with Salem, its amusing.
So i guess Calen sends them in the general dirction of where the most Miasma and Senboku activity is?
I looove this sentence! It really brings out Lilly's personality!
"Yeah, enough fooling around here." Lilly said, putting down her cup of tea which she had just took a sip out of.
The new foreshadowing at the end... hmmm.. can't wait to read more!