This is amazingly written. Such passion! Lovely, keep it up :D

I'd be interested to read more. Don't be afraid of posting your work.
I enjoyed this poem. It's the sort of style I like. Grammar error with the "your" in the fourth line, though. Should be "you're". I'm not sure why there is a comma after the "about" on the sixth line, or after the "wanted" in the second last line. These are kind of minor things though. Good job. Post more.