Okay, so, the first thing I'd like to point out is that you spelled Grief wrong for the title, but besides that, I couldn't find any major or minor mistakes. I don't really think that the soccer part is all nessassary because it's so different from the rest of the story, but that's just my opinion. I'm not flaming this poem, I actually really loved it. It's very deep and clear, so it's easy to understand what you're trying to get across. Anyway, I hope to see more poems like this in the future, because this was very enjoyable for me to read. Sunny