I love the story, good job on it, it has real potential, but... you need to use more periods. Commas are good to use, as long as they're not the only punctuation mark in use. Other than that, good job!

Interesting story! I like your character's back story, it seems she's had a very interesting life so far. I also think it's nice that she is a girl and such a skilled assassin and all around bad ass. :) And it seems that you did you research on weapons and what not, I like how legit the info is. Keep up the good work, I'm enjoying your story so far!