|Reviews for Top of the Chain|
| Small Wings Flying 7/15/12 . chapter 1
I like the sentence [A planet filled with luscious trees, dominant mountains, and majestic seas] because it has a nice ring to it, almost in a poetic sense, and paints a lovely picture in so few words.
What I don't like so much is the amount of characters in the last scene because things changed so fast, it was difficult to keep up and understand which conversation was going where. More confusion than necessary in my opinion; I'd recommend fleshing that out a little.
Ohana from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
| Lord Slayer 7/15/12 . chapter 1
Hmm, for a first chapter this doesn't quite capture attention as much as it should. The first part with Charodan and Roger was pretty engaging, but then we go on to a sheriff chasing off some prankster and I lost interest. And what's a treant?
| MySadistChibi 7/15/12 . chapter 1
Well, since I'm new with original story reading, guess I'm gonna start reviewing whenever I can.
Great story! I love this kind of future Earth that's completely different and all! Really curious!
Can't wait to read more. ;)
| Link's Desires 7/14/12 . chapter 1
Looks good so far! I'll be sure to read on! :)