simple, cute and very well-written. I have a feeling I know these men already.

This was very interesting, left me with the feeling that Zelniks are the most beautiful creatures.

The beginning had me a little confused, when both characters were expressing their thoughts. It worked itself up to a beautiful ending though.
XOXO

Awe, how sweet! Awesome story, thanks for posting it!

Interesting. It seems vaguely sci-fi esque (I rarely pay attention to genres, so I don't know if you labeled it as that and I am now far too lazy to look it up now), but, aside from not really being a sci-fi or having any plot related to such...it was there. And I like that. I like being able to see hints of a world without it necessarly being the driving force of the story.

I also like the fact that the characters don't seem to realize the universe is different from ours, because that is simply /key/.

This was so incredibly fascinating.

Out of this story, the most intriguing thing that I can't stop wondering is... What exactly is this green... Stuff? On thr Zelniks? Is it like a symbiotic entity living within their bodies/on their skin?

Haha I also like that Hayal had it all wrong and the story had a happy ending. :)