|Reviews for Murder and Mayhem|
| Ego 8/9/12 . chapter 2
I am very interested in where you are going to take this story. Was more than a little disappointed when I came to the end of chapter two and found there was no chapter three yet. Hope you find time to give us an update soon.
| Benjamin Thorne 7/25/12 . chapter 2
Very good work on this chapter. I can just see Zoe showing up whenever they start investigationg in a Sherlock-esque costume. Can't wait to see where you're going with this. Side note- please don't do the standard form for mystery novels and hide important details or clues from the readers when the characters find them. It would be much better if the clues were cryptic or only made sense when looked at in a certain way so that those readers (much like I) who like to figure out what's going on as it happens can. Can't wait for the next chapter. As Winston Churchill said, "K.B.O."
| vivi493 7/24/12 . chapter 2
I really enjoy reading this story. Cant wait for updates!
| e 7/18/12 . chapter 1
Love this! Can't wait to read more :)
| You make me go asdfghjk 7/19/12 . chapter 1
i hate it when great stories like yours don't get recognized. ._. I LOVE IT. you're an amazing writer. I hope you get MANY views and reviews. :) Check my story out, it's the same genre as yours.
| Benjamin Thorne 7/19/12 . chapter 1
Very good. There are a few material errors that you might want to go back and fix, but other than that, this story seems to be wonderfully developed. You've set the stage for the club, the friends, and even the love interest rather perfectly in the first chapter. The pace is not overly fast, which is often a downfall for many writers, but is instead a managable novel-length pace. The only thing I dislike is how caught up we get in the insecure thoughts of a teenage girl. But that's probably because I'm a guy. If I were to make a suggestion, it would be that you write each chapter from a different character's viewpoint, thus allowing us all of the character's thoughts and emotions while still giving us the main storyline. On a side note, and you may have already thought of this, but if Ty and Abby do end up dating, it will have to be after the murder is wrapped up and the killer caught, as relationships in general do not develop -or at least do not develop well- over a murder. Can't wait for the next chapter. As Winston Churchill said, "KBO".
| NinjahTime 7/18/12 . chapter 1
This is really good!