I knew Lane was going to die around the time he said "a couple of rumors. Nothing I'm sure they're not doing." Guess he's not that genre savvy, haha.

That was a great twist at the end, though. I'll bet nobody guess that one right. Well done, Mr. Lawrence. Very well done!

That was absolutely brilliant. The beginning was a little bit slow, but you kept me reading, and I loved the distractions and characters you added in the middle. The end was simply amazing. This whole story was a gem.
I would have loved for you to add an image, but that was the only thing I would have changed.
Keep up the awesome work. You have a real talent for this.