|Reviews for That Summer Holiday|
| Catalina Brown 8/6/12 . chapter 2
Great story so far!
| Isis 47 7/30/12 . chapter 2
Ah, Rachel. Tipical teen. N'K, here's the full report:
I didn't like how you wrote out the role-call. It was kind of useless, and I skipped that part entirely. Besides, from the looks of it you aren't going to use the rest of the kids, so we didn't need to know their names.
"It's not that, it's just, there's no-one waiting outside anymore. They've gone."
-Ah, now here we have a problem.
I liked the rest, but you didn 't need for everyone to call Rachel a idiot, we kind of get the point. So . . . constructive criticism. Hope you continue, I'd like to see how a bunch of teens survive in a school.
Of course, I'D love to live in a building as big as that without adult supervision . . .
| Isis 47 7/30/12 . chapter 1
Hm. Interesting story so far, and thanks for reviewing mine. Also, PM feature would make life a lot easier.
I would honestly think that twins would be a bit nicer to each other, since they have the same social group. Also, they seem to have a bad habit there of throwing things at each other (I've read the second chapter too. But let's take things one at a time, shall we?).
"Rachel. Dinner. Now!" I shreiked.
-Now THAT I can imagine to be a sibling relationship.
Alrighty. Onto chapter two.