| Reviews for 01 Liberty Jones: Primitive Agents |
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Debate4life 12/12/12 . chapter 10They're very cute together. I enjoyed this story. |
Storyteller Ann 9/4/12 . chapter 10Is it the end? ("End" meaning that long pause before part 2) Now I have to re-read and think. I think the only thing that I didn't like was that things went too fast. It's not that you have to explain more things, but things have to happen in a slower pace, so readers have more time to undestand. I hope to read more about Lib and Katherine's adventurers throughout the galaxy and Riko and Mika's struggles in the upcoming war and Amaya's search for her destinated partner. It's such an interesting universe! |
Storyteller Ann 8/24/12 . chapter 8After Chapter 7, I was holding by breath and praying Katherine wouldn't die. I still pray for her, but I can't hold my breath anymore, so... I though that after saying that the muician pronoum for Lib's gender was 'hen' you were going to stick to it. I love Lib's personality. I could elaborate, but that would sound fangirlish and I try to avoid that. I can barely wait for the next chapter, keep up with the great work. |
Storyteller Ann 8/11/12 . chapter 6After all the emotions in the previous chapters, this chapter was very calm, and I just noticed one thing: Lib started sharing his/her/its feelings more, is it okay? Seems kinda of fast... And I feel this chapter contains informations that will be important when the plot starts to unravel, and that I will need to re-read it soon. Will you add more accurate descriptions of the characters? I particularly like the freedom to give them faces and attires more to my taste, but some more descriptions could be helpful. Your story is great, I'll be waiting anxiously for the next chapter. (And maybe meanwhile I'll re-read the previous ones, search for clues about the plot...) |
Storyteller Ann 8/7/12 . chapter 5I loved it. I want to know who owns TSX BARON, I want to know about the gods, I want to know everything about Lib. By the way, I think of Lib as a 'he'. |
Guest 8/5/12 . chapter 4 It's a shame you haven't gotten any reviews yet (unless this new site layout has muddled me even more than I thought), because this story's actually quite entertaining and well-written. I'd given up on fictionpress for decent and fun stories some time ago, but I'm glad I popped back in for a bit. Keep up the good writing; the wit and humor is especially appreciated as that sort of thing is all too often executed poorly. The turnaround for Katherine as a character from abductee to accomplice was a bit fast, granted, and the issue of the rest of the poor little humans was also glazed over pretty quickly, but those are minor quibbles. Well, those are my two cents anyway. Keep on writing, and here's to more good chapters (and if anyone else is reading this review, add your own for crying out loud! It's one of the best motivating factors ever.) Flavius |