ummm The story was good I liked the start cause that was scary! But then when the cam came the story just well you know...umm...turned-out-not-like-i-had-expected and all the fun was spoiled by the guys in blue and red!

I liked this story. It reminds me of Harrison Bergeron by Kurt Vonnegut. If improvement needed to be done, I would say to add more detail. I think it would allow the reader to linger and enjoy the story even more.