|Reviews for Apprentice of the Dark|
| HikariGaijin 10/15/12 . chapter 2
This chapter could use a bit of work. First of all, Liam is indeed having to deal with the ideal of becoming a man, but his character isn't very interesting. Second, I don't know if this is set in medieval times, but maybe words like "awesome" should be avoided. Nothing to note after that.
| HikariGaijin 10/15/12 . chapter 1
Somewhat strong start with this. I really like the description you gave this story, and you're managing to keep everything really light right now, but I kind of wish there was a bit of background on the characters, particularly Liam.
| Jave Harron 10/6/12 . chapter 1
Okay, the start of the chapter had some good descriptions of your characters. However, as fantasy stories often do, there's a good bit of exposition in there (although some is obviously thematically relevant). The first chapter is a bit dialogue heavy, but the characters seem a bit confusing near the end, at least who is saying what. The characters don't seem to have much distinct 'voice' in that last conversational segment.
| Tanuki-san-chan-kun-whatever 9/24/12 . chapter 1
It very interesting, and I really like it! Thats the only the thing I can think of...
| Melody Melone 8/11/12 . chapter 1
| Swallow-tailed Kite 8/5/12 . chapter 2
well duh you speak in a voice ._.
"Risa, Durant, and Liam all stepped back together as Evlein began to speak in a voice."
that needs correcting xD