|Reviews for Another Face|
| AspiringAuthorVia 9/15/12 . chapter 2
"Matt was shocked into doing what he was order..." You mean 'ordered', I think.
Also, I don't know what a futon is, so maybe you meant to type something else? I'm not sure.
I wonder about Matt wondering about 'their motives'. I wouldn't exactly find a mother and daughter suspicious. Curious thought. Maybe you have a reason for it though.
"After a moment, Mat responded..." 'Matt' has two t's.
"...Mat sounded relieved..." Same thing.
"...a-buzzing around and bother kind souls." My guess is that you mean 'bothering'.
Olive's husband's alternate is creepy! And so is his speech! It's unnerving.
In general, I think the whole 'two personalities' is a really good idea, and pills seems like a logical way to suppress the second. I have to wonder if a second personality is always bad though; it could simply be... different. I think it would be fun to come up with characters like that! Anyway, nicely done!
| Guest 7/31/12 . chapter 2
I like this chapter even more than the first! I lpve the entire idea of alternates. This was thrilling, and the James' alternate is creepy!