I really enjoyed your descriptions, they were very original and gave a beautiful picture of the girl.
However, this is an extremely short oneshot, and I thought you could have expanded things more. It just seemed too brief.
Also, I really liked your first line. It immediately sucks the reader (or at least me) into the story, because I instantly want to know what the girl's like.
Nice work.
(by the way, what happened to White? I liked that story)

wow how sweet i liked the it alot

Wow I loved this. Fantastic job.