|Reviews for MNB: The Monian National Base I|
| F.S.N. Stefan 11/28/12 . chapter 26
The battle scenes are good. The end seems almost perfect. Only some wrong words that I can't find its meanings. Never mind. I skipped those to read the real fun parts of all chapters. All in all, this story is very good. I hope the sequel will be very enjoyable.
| F.S.N. Stefan 11/28/12 . chapter 22
I like the mermaids' attack. It was so fun. They hunt very fast under the depths of water.
| F.S.N. Stefan 11/23/12 . chapter 18
From all chapters I have read, I know the story itself is fun. I feel very fun when I read it even if sometimes I forgot some characters. Only few wrong grammars and words in every chapter that hurt me. But it doesn't matter because I can compare with words on dictionary that is similar to the word I want to find. Don't worry. I won't stop reading the story, I'll keep reading more soon.
| anonymous 11/17/12 . chapter 1
All I can really say is first proof-read.
Second describe more about the things your narrator is seeing.
| studioworking 10/23/12 . chapter 25
| studioworking 10/23/12 . chapter 23
Ok so two chapters before you said Sicily was shot, but then the next chapter she was still in the boat and then she drowned? I don't get it
| studioworking 10/23/12 . chapter 21
How many chapters will this be?
| studioworking 10/18/12 . chapter 14
That only disturbed me a little, it's a good thing you didn't go into detailXD
| studioworking 10/18/12 . chapter 11
The fairies actually scare me! That's the sign of a good writer, if you make the reader feel what you want them to feel then your being successful!
| F.S.N. Stefan 10/16/12 . chapter 8
It's good. I'll continue reading this story more tomorrow.
| studioworking 10/14/12 . chapter 10
This is really interesting! Haha I am spamming you with reviews
| studioworking 10/14/12 . chapter 7
I still like it:)
| studioworking 10/14/12 . chapter 5
| annoyed 10/11/12 . chapter 6
your summary sounded good. i have to stop reading because of your stupidly large gaps in knowledge.
1. a few chapters back you listed 'noble gasses' neon was the only noble gas in that list.
2. GPS stands for Global Positioning System and requires satellites to work - they would have no map.
3. your spelling and grammar has too many mistakes to ignore.
this would be a good story if you spent the time to read through what you were writing and researched the points you clearly don't know anything about.
| studioworking 10/10/12 . chapter 2
Uhhhh well I'm a lot younger than you think..so I didn't really understand it..but I like it! And when I say that I mean it!