What's next, what's next?
I did not like the fact that you killed her partner. I mean, I just like the original characters than dragging in new ones. But, well, I am still sad on that part.
You had one miss-spelling in the middle of the chapter "I'm woring on it" but that is all I could find.
Enjoyed it and look foreward to the next one. (Still dissappointed in the other guy being dead.)

Good chapter.. Sorry I reviewed so late... I had a long day in which I am sort if sad right now :(

Good luck with that sister.

Ouch, I imagine that hurt just a little bit.

Oh boy. I can see this going all kinds of bad.

good luck, and just keep updateing and ill keep reading

:( Still sad. Going to mope forever. Good chapter.

aha! Smart girl... Wow, I dont know if I like Kira yet... She seems like she could be a handful. Anways,... WTF! I TOLD YOU THAT MORGEN ISNT ALLOWED TO DIE!

yeah yeah i know they help but must you leave us with yet anoyjer cliff hanger!

Good, and don't be too joyful. I will be off possible after this chapter. Another week to survive through, lol. This was good. Keep it up, no grammar mistakes yet. Look forward to the next chapter.

You jumped back and forth in tenses in this chapter.

And I can't wait to see what her father has to say for himself.

Lol, a secret passage Lucy? Really? Because it's always that easy.

grr i hate when its a cliff hanger! oh well post again soon i cant wait to read her reaction!

Woah?! Umm.. He isn't a coward?! Phooey thanks for being that wonderful person who isn't always so cliched.

yeah a fast update. have more like that i would love that. heehee either way i still love the story!

Victor sounds sweet.. But was he flirting?