|Reviews for The Elementals vs The Empire: Rebellion|
| CrackMeOpen 8/4/12 . chapter 2
I kind of feel bad for the four of them, in the snow. It's like going to the desert for the first time...the heat alone, not any scorpion or serpent, would kill you.
Zedor is kind of like their mentor...to shape them, right? That was a pretty good idea. It was slightly sudden, but it fitted well.
Speaking of which, the names were pretty good! They were unique and pretty-cool sounding.
The fact that they made the four ( or six ) of them met in the forest, and not in some pub or club or something also fitted along that adventurous theme.
For now, I really don't have any advice to give you (however, your excessive use of dialogue was great! Some people just don't use dialogue a lot!) but I will review your next chapter and keep up the good work!