|Reviews for dancing and too much to drink and maybe love|
| Anihyr Moonstar 9/30/12 . chapter 1
While I'm not usually a fan of prose that breaks grammatical rules, in this case I'm going to make an exception. Because you're consistent and obviously know the rules, but are purposefully choosing to break them in a contained, stylistic fashion, I think it works. It adds to the narrator's voice and makes everything flow.
I also love how natural this feels. Each sentence seems to swim into the next almost stream-of-conscious, as though it really is being rambled off to the reader, but it works. Lovely job. :)