| Reviews for Three Crusaders: Disciplines of pain |
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MysteriousFire 1/31/13 . chapter 2I liked the several POV changes in this chapter. It was refreshing to see the scene from two POV's and know both Zoey and Jason's thoughts. Also, Jason is really great, sticking up for his friends like that. Cemetery... Why am I not feeling good about this? |
MysteriousFire 1/31/13 . chapter 1I really like the story so far! I can easily sympathise with Jason and the story kept me reading. Sometimes the story goes a bit quickly maybe, like I wouldn't hug someone on the day I met them. But maybe that's just me :p Also, I like how you tell this story as a video diary. It's a good style for this story. One remark, maybe you could put things that arent part of the story (like 'chapter 1', the title, the author's note at the end, ...) in bold, because it's easier to read? Now I'm off to chapter 2! |
jakbnimble 1/12/13 . chapter 6Such a sad chapter! I could barely believe it when I read it. Hoping Jason can figure out why this happened to him, and then seek vehement vengeance. |
phantom130 5 1/12/13 . chapter 6Wow! I love your description with fight scenes! You make them so epic! (Better than reading manga lol) At first I thought the reaper may be some kind of illusion created by Jason's sister, just because it happened so close to Jason getting promoted, but now I don't think so. I really feel bad for Jason. His fight with Lucifer should be pretty epic though, especially now because Jason has several reasons to hate him (Even though Jason said before that he doesn't hate.) I could see Lucifer trying to bring hate, and anger out of Jason. Also I love Yukiko! She's adorable! I loved the scene with the drawings and how you kind of gave her more of a personality by having her explain how she used to be depressed. |
phantom130 5 1/12/13 . chapter 5Wow that confrontation with Jason and Zoey's dad was epic and a little scary. I'm glad to see that Zoey's dad has gained some more respect for Jason too, but I'm a little surprised by his last lines. I can't believe he went so quickly from pretty much trying to kill Jason to basically saying that his daughter "picked a great guy to fall for". |
phantom130 5 1/12/13 . chapter 4I loved the fight scene! Nice idea with the different classes of demons and demon hunters :P I also loved Jason's last lines to the demon. "I personally wanted to watch an action movie but Zoey wanted to see a romance, Tony wanted to see a Mystery, Angel wanted to see a horror flick, Yukiko wanted to see an animated movie, and Leo didn't care at all. So we all did rock paper scissors for it." lol it's just a random thought, but I'm curious what would happen if Leo won the rock, paper, scissors lol. :P |
jakbnimble 11/12/12 . chapter 5Holy... Wow! E-class demon hunters are evidently amazing! Excited to see that Jason and Zoey are a little closer to confessing their feelings for each other too. :D |
jakbnimble 11/3/12 . chapter 4That. Was. Epic! I loved the action, loved the emotion, loved it all! I also think that the classes of demons and demon hunters is a really cool idea. I'm sure Jason is fine, but I'm so worried about him! :S And I'm wondering about the glowing auras the others had around them... Fantastic job! |
phantom130 5 10/30/12 . chapter 3Neat chapter. I really liked the scene at the cemetery. It may have seemed like filler, but it helped give me a better idea about Jason's powers. Yukiko also seems really neat. I can't wait for the update. I want to know how a movie theater could be dangerous XD |
jakbnimble 10/28/12 . chapter 3Why? Why must cliffhangers taunt me so? I must know what happens next! |
jakbnimble 10/28/12 . chapter 2Great chapter! Love the action! I was cracking up at Tony's corny joke. :D Can't wait to see what you've written next! |
jakbnimble 10/27/12 . chapter 1Very interesting intro. It was nice to get a little background on Jason and Zoey before you delve into the story. I feel so sad for both of them... Great work! |
phantom130 5 8/20/12 . chapter 2I'm glad to see Zoey and Jason's relationship has progressed over the time skip. I'm excited to read more. |
DarknessesDownfall 8/17/12 . chapter 1wooow XD This was amazing! (Sorry took so long :( I never seemed to have time to finish reading it which upset me DX) You're very talented! Please continue :3 |
phantom130 5 8/12/12 . chapter 1Awesome story! I think this one may be my favorite so far out of all your stories, although they're all awesome. I really liked the intro to the story and the characters! It just sucks that FictionPress doesn't seem to have as many readers as FanFiction does... Hopefully you'll get more reviews when you post up chapter two. |