I like this a lot as a light, fun story, but you might want to improve your grammar and sometimes it doesn't quite make sense and it is hard to tell which character is speaking-but those small things aside, this is a really good story!
BTW, isn't it Party Rick Anthem?

I like this... I love stories that are set on the beach, and this is a great story in general. I don't have time to read the other two chapter now, but I will later since I enjoy this so much :)