|Reviews for The Cause of Our Own Destruction|
| Scarlet-SKull 8/9/12 . chapter 1
Strange man lol What threw me off was that he was talking in broken English before, and now, he talks as if he's a wise man. Can't wait to see where Rich will find himself in next!
"Painfully Richard sat up as his…" Could be, -Painfully, Richard sat up as his…- or -Richard painfully sat up as his…-
"Richard stood up and brushed the sand off of him about as well as anyone could rid" I know what you're trying to say but if you say it aloud, it sounds a bit off.
Can't wait for the next chap!
| Chase 8/9/12 . chapter 1
It's a great little thing to read when your bored alone at your house with not one. Ha. but i'm not really into it alot cause it's not my thing.
| Claire-Inet 8/9/12 . chapter 1
Wow...I don't really know what to say except...
Kudos! Just brilliance! Now, I'm not usually a fan of one-shots or short stories, but this was really good! And I liked the use of the poem in the beginning...
Just absolute lovliness! And I really like the message in the end.
The cliff hanger was nicely put too...
Kudos to you, Luna's Pen...a job well done :D 3