|Reviews for Prom Date|
| The Girl that writes 9/19/12 . chapter 1
Dear Enid Blyton,
I loved your story. It's obvious you put time and effort into this. I loved how you were so very descriptive and you used the perfect words for each and every sentence. Keep up the good work!
| Jamie Scarlett 9/19/12 . chapter 1
This could potentially be a great story - it has a brilliant plot but it just seems to randomly end. Maybe you could add something to this chapter or add a second chapter to tie everything up.
| Len Lynx 9/19/12 . chapter 1
Tsk, tsk, see THIS is what happens when you forget to specify. Magic is tricky and made primarily of loopholes. This was pretty fun to read, and a really great, original idea.
| SetoJouFan 9/19/12 . chapter 1
I liked this story. It was certainly unique and had it's own twist. Most people would assume that his best friend would end up as his date. I however liked where you took this. I'm not sure about the prices for spells though. I can understand it being a couple hundred dollars but six? For normal high schoolers that's expensive even for prom. Jenny's voice at the end leaves a sort of mystery. Is it him remembering words she has previously spoken, or does she have magic and was in on it?
| SkyFox345 9/19/12 . chapter 1
Its pretty good but its not really my cup of tea.
| MirrorDoll 9/19/12 . chapter 1
This is sooooo good. I love how your writing seems effortless. Your plot is amazing and you definetly catch your readers' attention. One thing thou, when you have dialog you should try to seperate it from the rest of the paragraph and thoughts or memories don't need to be in quotations. All-in-all it is a very good story.
| foreverawait 9/19/12 . chapter 1
Great chapter, I love it!
He's a girl lol, awkwardddd. :)
Keep it up! :D
| AriaRose7 9/19/12 . chapter 1
I really liked this. I knew the spell would probably backfire but I never would have guessed that! Nice twist. I loved how Danny got more and more confused about his emotions as the night went on. You wrote that really well. All in all, great story! :)
| HouseofAnubis writer 9/19/12 . chapter 1
this is really amazing! i love the entire idea of it!
| Megsi 9/19/12 . chapter 1
This was quite an interesting idea for a story and the execution was good. The name of the magic store and the store itself seemed somewhat cliched but I loved the idea of the spell and how it worked. The descriptions were pretty strong and the dialogue was fairly realistic so good job for that.
The only thing I wonder at is where you ended it. I guess there's a lesson to be learned in the story but there's so much I still want to know. Does he stay like that? Does he go back to the store and confront the old man? Has the store disappeared? If he goes back to normal how does everyone remember their prom night? It seems like there's still so much to tell; there's still a whole story untold but you say it's complete? It does work just ending it there but with his problem not having been solved I wonder if there will be a follow-up story?
| 7PenguinPrincess7 9/18/12 . chapter 1
You know, when you asked me to review I thought it wouldn't be that great but it was freaking awesome! I loved it! good job, you should like make more stories revolving around that man at the store!
| Saeori 9/18/12 . chapter 1
I take back my earlier statement in the private message. This. Was. Awesome.
The magic shop with the gender-altering clothes is a bit cliche, but only a bit. Think I saw it in some anime.
But it was satisfyingly funny in that inappropriate but hilarious way to read of a guy who put on panties and a lace bra (snicker snicker).
One thing I really liked was the description you used. And being female yourself, the way you made your central character seem ''believable'' is very admirable. Keep at it!
One thing I can warn about for the future is trolls. Put simply for those unfamiliar with American slang, not everyone who uses the site will understand ''wu da heq yu meen". Put simply, there are illiterate people out there who won't stop twice to attempt to demean you (sorry about my overuse of putsimplies), dont let them dictate what you can and cannot write.
Write on, friend. Write on.
| UnknownAccountPerson 9/18/12 . chapter 1
Pretty good story. I like it. :) Good job!
| guppylove 9/18/12 . chapter 1
This is very hard to relate to, but you do have a way with words. Very interesting use of character point of view.
| Cap's Girl 9/18/12 . chapter 1
I really like your story! We kind if have the same writing style!
I think we do, if you want I have a story on my account called Ready to Run co written by MissaRissa826, would you mind reading it and giving us some tips to get more reviews?