It is great that you pointed that out. Most of the popular teenagers that have everything don't really care about anybody else and it is great to hear that there are people in the world who are kind, who do care about somebody elses happiness and not just their own. Thank you. :D

"Even the bus driver is an archaic lady with at least eight piercing."... piercings

I like this piece because it shows the powerful, but complicated connection between some siblings. Some people might criticize him for not standing up for her, but your showing how he cares for her is really sweet and honestly really realistic. A lot of people won't stand up when others are making fun of someone.

My only thing is you said "The suck up asks who Jordan is." but you hadn't said who Jordan was. I'm guessing it's the junior talking to his girlfriend but you want to make that clearer somehow,

PS Check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (link in my profile). It's a great place to get reviews! (if you don't mind giving them of course)

aw that was sweet(: