| Reviews for Sleeping Beauty |
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Natari Mirumura 8/22/12 . chapter 1This poem is amazing! Such beautiful elligance it has. I must say. the lst two stanza's are mind blowing. Amazing, keep it up :D |
simpleplan13 8/12/12 . chapter 1In the first and second stanza you use the word face. It just sounded repetitive to me. I would like to hear about some other part about her. "'What are you dreaming about',"... I feel like the comma should be inside the quote "life-filled eyes open up."... I loved that description. It was such a creative and amazing way to describe someone's eyes. I didn't get why in "your arms were wrapped around.." and "to me.." you used two dots. Not a period and not an ellipse. It confused me. "The simple,/yet beautiful sight/is almost addicting,"... I really liked this as well. It's a great way to describe the scene and how it feels to the narrator. I liked the piece. It was really sweet and well written. Nice job. PS Check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (link in my profile). It's a great place to get reviews! (if you don't mind giving them of course) |