|Reviews for The Fiery Dusk|
| Lia Jenson 8/13/12 . chapter 1
Yeah, Dusk likes to say "Yeah" a LOT, yeah?
Besides that bit...of course, she of course has many, many verbal tics. And this story itself has many mistakes.
"I love music more than anything and I play many instruments, quit well infact." I see, Dusk plays QUITE well.
" I mostly like to the low brass instruments, or percussion. It just really depends on my moon." To...PLAY low brass? And is she a werewolf, her instruments depend on her MOON? Did you mean MOOD? Like in the next part?
P.S.-Dusk is coming across as a Mary Sue already. Look it up; there's even a Mary Sue test. Almost no one likes a Mary Sue, especially not me. Won't be sticking around.