This is really good so far! I clicked it by accident, but I'm glad I did. Update soon!

It's not a bad beginning for a story. Though it's a little short on description. Try to set the scene more, as for all I know this could be happening on a hovercraft over a blood red sand planet with twisted deformed animals running around! Try to not rely on speech to tell things to the audience. Your dialogue is rather stiff, remember it's a conversation you have to get into the character's mindset and think "Why would they say this?"

Hoped some of this helped, but please right more!